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life 1 min read 887 views Mar 1, 2015

Distant

She and I

can never be

for she will never

let me see

her most intimate side:

Her vulnerabilities.

Although I lead

by my example

granting ample

access to

where I’m most fragile,

she will not reciprocate

and that seals our fate –

struck gavel.

 

- HymnAgen

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recklessmonet

I feel this and I feel we can all relate. Her vulnerabilities. though I lead by my example granting ample access to where I’m most fragile, I'm really feeling those lines.

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hymnagen

Can't really connect to someone who will not let you in. Thanks for your comment, recklessmonet

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mrmelody7

relationships to me the word sounds like negotiations between to foreign enemies that's just me, admire those who try to handle them, me outta here

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hymnagen

Without negotiation we never arrive at compromise. In my experience it's always about compromise. If either one is unwilling, we're done. Thanks for the read, sir

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hymnagen

^^I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading

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2b2b2

Great Capture....ONE

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hymnagen

Thanks, 2b. Peace

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DallasCowgirl

Sounds like something someone once said about me. The only thing is my response was IDGAF....True story. Could you please write a piece that mirrors my response? Lol jk ;) This is A very Heartfelt piece that brings back ill memories.

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hymnagen

Underhiswings7, ain't no secret that you got skillz so pen it yo d@mn self! LOL Fo real tho, if you are so inclined, I'll be first in line to read it. Appreciate you, sis.#Respect

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DallasCowgirl

I think I'm going to take you up on that... ;)

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VomitOutTheMouth

beautiful i love it

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VomitOutTheMouth

beautiful i love it emotional

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hymnagen

VomitOutTheMouth, thanks for reading it!

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KingQadarDwon'

Deep bro.... Mad Skills!! I'm tryna get up there with you..

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hymnagen

KingQadarDwon, I'm walking on the same ground beside you, brotha, but I appreciate the read and comment. Peace

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kavindra

Beautiful ,but what if you just don't hear and she is expressing , sometimes the lines of communication are blurred , sometimes we only hear if its what we want to hear . but is very true , must open up and show all your secrets and fears-vulnerabilities .How to know one's true self with out knowing this ... (facing yourself is probably one of the scariest things to do) I love your word choices in this piece . The emotion and imagery is well place . This comes from a true artist Heart ! You have inspired me to write about facing your true self : Thank you

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hymnagen

Kavindra, I address "not hearing" in the following piece: http://www.poetryvibe.com/poetry/11179/Gray-Skies.html#.VRtYNO7F-Xy "Distant" was inspired by someone who would d@mn near go mute rather than tell me what she was feeling. I appreciate you reading it and sharing your thoughts on the topic, and I so look forward to another of your POWERFUL yet concise works of art!

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love_supreme

I dont see how I could have missed this one. Excellent write.

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