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My heart speaks when my pen leaks on blank sheets / Leaving indelible ink on the parts where your brain thinks

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Train

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The thought of the strategically placed fixtures within the train cart intrigued her for she was infatuated with the crowded  seats and inhabited corners. She was moved with the swaying of the train and the uneasy movements that came with being unbalanced. Her imagination ran frantically, as she sought the secret morse codes of the electronic scripts that hinted at an uncharted destination. But, the ill-mannered facial expressions and gawking of the eyes, along with the contaminated notion of supposedly friendly gestures became that constant reminder of what she will spend the rest of her life running from. Stand clear of the closing doors please...

 

 

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Woven says:

Detailed description takes us into the heart of the train's inner workings, and inside the exciting, yet uncomfortable feel of being unbalanced. Intricate write, superb!

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danielleangie3 says:

Thank you. I appreciate it!

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social seer says:

Is this "woman" described as inescapable object? Language and symbols expertly rendered.
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WarriorCarryingWater says:

Love it!
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danielleangie3 says:

Yes @social seer, and thank you as well.

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danielleangie3 says:

Thank you @nosajm 😊

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SMusinga says:

I want to thank you so much for writing this poem. You have no possible idea how much it really touched me. Really.. this is your best in my opinion.

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danielleangie3 says:

Thank you for your kind compliment. I truly appreciate it.

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love_supreme says:

This story was told vividly. You can really feel this write.

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