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miss_chaniel
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he poetically thrilled me

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Can he understand my ink 
The way it's spilled on his body 

His lips left indelible memory 
Only a diary can read 

The way his eyes hunt 
my body like an  canvas
 an essential piece 

A love letter being written with his fingers
His tongue enclosed His touch is like surprised wind 
Only to end with penetrated chills 

.........to end the night with poem he help create 

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kavindra says:

I like this I would like to make a suggestion in the 3rd stanza second line take out the "s" in the word likes- and on the next line take out the word like all together--- so it would read like this " the way his eyes hunt my body like canvas an essential piece" it is of course always your choice how you wish it to be I just think if written this way it comes across as (your body is the canvas of his master piece )

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Miss_chaniel says:

I'll take note of that thanks for reading
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The Immortal Wize says:

I like it a lot.
 

RobinJPFTS says:

Very nice!

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